To: Brad Blackstone
From: Wee Li Fang
Date: September 20,
2016
Subject: Self
Introduction
Dear Brad,
My name is Wee Li Fang, from Telematics in Singapore
Institute of Technology (SIT). I am writing this email to you to share with you
more information about myself.
To start off, I will begin with my course in polytechnic. Prior
to entering university, I was actually from the same course from Nanyang
Polytechnic in Telematics & Media Technology (TMT). Most people would assume that I enrolled in telematics due to it being related to my course in polytechnic. However, modules like engineering mathematics that were taught there, was not as in depth as compared to the similar modules taught here in SIT .
Before joining TMT in Nanyang Polytechnic, I must admit that I did not have the faintest idea about what telematics was at all. However after attending this course, I realized that telematics
is applicable to our everyday life. For example: the recording of a speeding
car using the high speed camera and the findings are recorded in the system for
us to analyze.
In addition to this, I had designed an application for both
android watch and phone for my final year project. The application notified the
user that his/her family member has fainted at home. Thus, ithas captured my interests
in this course because I could also build something that would help contribute to the
society.
With that, I hope you would have a better understanding of
my background.
Yours sincerely,
Wee Li Fang
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I have commented on Jamie, Telson and Jia Wei's blog.
Edited on 29 September 2016
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ReplyDeleteDear Li Fang,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your post as through your post, I got to know more about you. I liked the part about your final year project as it seems like an interesting project to work on. I would like to know more about your goals for the future especially your career prospect in the field of Telematics.
Regards,
Jamie
Thank you for your kind words, I would take note on the suggestion that you have given.
DeleteRegards,
Lifang
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ReplyDeleteDear Li Fang,
ReplyDeleteGood to hear that you have come to know more about telematics after taking up telematics in SIT. It would be good if you were to add in your aim for the future, what would you like to achieve in the future after you graduate.
Regards,
Jia Wei
Thank you for your kind words, I would take note on the suggestion that you have provided.
DeleteRegards,
Lifang
Dear Li Fang,
ReplyDeleteThank you for the courteous introduction. The example that you gave, on how students from relevant engineering diplomas may find engineering modules in university, to be more in-depth and challenging was concise.
A suggestion that i have for your email, would be to tell us more about your interests and your aims for the future.
Overall, your email provided me with a clear understanding, on how we could use our Telematics knowledge to create great products that help improve the lives of others.
Regards,
Telson
Thank you for your kind word, I would take note on the suggestion that you have provided.
DeleteRegards,
Lifang
Dear Li Fang,
ReplyDeleteI am glad to hear that you are continuing to pursue Telematics as a career, as you have already done an interesting project during your polytechnic days. All the best!
Regards,
Sze Dee
Thank you, Li Fang, for this informative letter. From the letters I have read so far, it seems you are one of the very few in our class who has studied telematics. It was good to learning about your interesting project work. I'm sure we can all benefit from your knowledge and experience, which will be especially useful when we start our own focused project work.
ReplyDeleteYou have lots of good feedback from classmates in this post. A few of them have mentioned wanting to hear more about your other interests. That would be good, too, of course, as we would like to know more about who you are.
Aside from content, there are also a few language issues with this letter:
1) I will begin with my course in polytechnic. >>> (verb tense)
2) ...what exactly is telematics .... >>> (wrong sentence structure: this is a statement not a question)
3) However after attending this course... >>> (punctuation)
4) For example, the recording of a speeding car using the high speed camera and the findings are recorded in the system for us to analyze. >>> (fragment)
5) ...I had built .... >>>> (verb tense)
6) can also built >>> (verb form)
I appreciate all your effort so far and looking forward to learning more about you.
Dear Brad,
DeleteThank you for your kind feedback. I hope that i will have the chance to apply my telematics knowledge for the project work.
I have took note of the language issues that you mentioned and have made the necessary change to the letter.
Regards,
Lifang
Dear Li Fang,
ReplyDeleteI have learnt a lot more about you after reading your introduction. I am happy that you are actually learning more about Telematics in SIT. However, I am interested to know more about your interests too.
Furthermore, I do notice a few grammar mistakes in your introduction.
1) what actually I could get from attending this course -> what I could actually get from attending this course
2) telematics -> Telematics
3) For example, the recording of a speeding car using the high speed camera and the findings are recorded in the system for us to analyse. (sentence structure)
Lastly, It was an insightful post about yourself and it was nice to know more about Telematics through your blogspot!
Here's to more teamwork together!
Cheers,
Sheryl Toh